I have in me a burning desire,
Why it makes everything so bizzare?
I stretch my hands to reach it,
Why it makes me feel so stupid?
I try to fly high in the sky,
Why i fall as winds pass by?
I want to talk to stars up high,
Why black clouds cover up as I sigh?
I walk down the aisle engrossed in memories,
Why i stumble as I close my eyes?
I feel someone close to me,
Why am I left alone without a bye?
I think there is something to gain,
Why it turns out to be only pain?
I feel like breaking free and running away,
But my desire always forces me to stay.................
its nyc...
ReplyDeleteBhai bahut wadiya...
ReplyDeleteBhai bahut saara dard h... tumahre dil o dimag me... Aise hi kavitayen likhate rahna...
Sixth para me to bhoot ka ahsaas h...
arre yaar yeh poetry n all..thoda 'over the head' ho jaati hai mere liye...wat i felt ki it was sorta pessimistic..since u said tht we shud comment so tht u cn improve..so i told u ths..rest it was gud..didnt knw ths talent was hidden in u...likhta reh.. :)
ReplyDeleteReally Good One..Straight from your heart.
ReplyDelete-Mohit
Great start !
ReplyDeleteKeep it up !
Tu to chhupa rustam nikla yaar !
achchhi hai kafi achahhi poem hai.
ReplyDeletekiski hai?
agar pakad le tujhe to sorry bol dena.
ok
mazak kar raha hoo bhai ji
nice poem
keep it up
this is good yaar.... shi ja rha hai achi shuruaat hai ydi tune hi likha hai.... if u r coping this poem that's not fare haan but ye tere life per fit baithti... hai to tu yeh kehkar to bach hi sakta hai...
ReplyDeletei like this poem too..
bhai sab band karke isi me time... spend kar then u will be a gud poet...chal itna hi keh sakta hu tere liye mein....
hey buddies
ReplyDeletedis z not a copy frm anywhere
100% original matter of mine
gud thoughts dear...
ReplyDeletemust say full f pain...
keep on goin wid these....
all d best bro....
amazin poetry..keep it up!!
ReplyDeleteawesome poem big bro...........
ReplyDeletegreat start ....
and keep going on.............
mere dil ko choo gayi
Nice one !
ReplyDeletemast
ReplyDeletehai
BIDDDUUUU!!!
1st line - "dats very much visible in ua eyes n talks"
ReplyDelete4th line - "koi ni,its b'coz its jst t start"
5th line - "wait n watch, n keep on moving, u'll one day"
7th line - "u'll one day"
11th line - "dats me.... sry,, dats God n ____"
13th & 14th line - "therz lot to gain. just keep ur MISSION & ur VISSION very much clear 2 u"
"n don't talk abt pain or emotions,they do not work in this corporate world"
15th & 16th line - "don't run away,u r not amongst one f thm"
"agr desire se kuch achha hota hai to desire achi hoti hain"
KEEP IT UP...
gud one for the starter....
ReplyDeletemast dude keep it up
ReplyDeleteWhat I can say for this is Awesome!!
ReplyDeleteUltimate work hai bhai......
I really likes it....